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So, here I go again. Harsh Truths is the last story to round out Bishop's character. Once it's concluded I promise not to bother you all with more of my dribble.

This time around there are even more characters involved. I assure you the words put in each other's mouth's are all with the editing and consent of everyone involved. This story just sort of went several directions at once, people getting involved, people wanting to be involved, and I cannot say how much of an honor and pleasure it is to have people interested in RPing with you, wanting to put up with me and this story, and get involved. It's been so incredibly entertaining for me (and hopefully them).

When this last Chronicle is concluded I'll likely post a synopsis of who and what Bishop is. Much of the story is revealed through the perceptions, personalities, and filters of the characters involved - including Bishop, so it may be worth hearing how the character came about and what decisions I'd made while planning out his past.

So, thank you again for your time, interest, and willingness to put up with one last tale from ol' Bishop.

Also, if you're involved in the story in any way and want to add your $0.02 on things, by all means feel free to drop me/us a line here and let us know your thoughts.

As always, I'm happy to answer questions and make clarifications to things my cruddy writing can't seem to make clear in these stories.

This has been the most fun I have ever had with a piece of writing, and the most fun I have had with Ava as a character. Both Avlynka and Bishop develop in the here and now, in a way that, though we are dealing with both science fiction and supernatural elements, really paints them both as living, breathing people, at least in my opinion. The best part was the interplay with Bishop, as we have the chance to see our characters, our online "selves", through the eyes of each other.

If Bishop intends to stop posting his "dribble", i will slap him, btw.

Quote:I looked to my wrist computer. 13:56.

This is a profound line. I think it's the first time in these stories that he looks at that thing for the time instead of the level of LPB Enzymes?

By the way, the word for a way of walking is "gait", not "gate". :)

(2011-06-01 17:27)Mirabi Tiane Wrote: [ -> ]

Quote:I looked to my wrist computer. 13:56.

This is a profound line. I think it's the first time in these stories that he looks at that thing for the time instead of the level of LPB Enzymes?

I'm pleased you noticed. I had originally written watch, then changed it - and in doing so thought of what that change actually meant in the scene.

(2011-06-01 17:27)Mirabi Tiane Wrote: [ -> ]By the way, the word for a way of walking is "gait", not "gate".

You are so right! ...and I so poor at editing. Thank you. Edited and fixed.

Quote:There is a certain humor when two suborned people come together; how they argue. Ava was suborned because she was strong, wanting to fight through her weakness, and resolute in her beliefs.

Spelling \o/

*sigh*

Thank you Kala. Noted and fixed.

I guess, in the end, it just shows you read the whole thing.

You only fixed the first one

*curses*

Ok, enough picking on Bishop's spelling... did people like the story or whats?

Yay! Yeah, it's a great story, awesome job guys Now Bishop. If you stop writing, I'm gonna be very disappointed in you. Therefore, you are not allowed to stop writing. Logic